a day in the life.


the nonbeliever. (cont)

Posted in Uncategorized by erin on the November 13, 2011

As I said, she was the coldest bitch I knew. She was rude and selfish living in a world of solitude and anger. She was blunt and mean but she called it honesty. It was a long time before I saw her smile, but I can still play the half hearted smirk in my mind like an old movie reel. I honestly can’t tell you why we fell in love, the gods were not in our favor, and we were the epitome of opposite. But in the ocean at the beach, she emerged from the water and opened her eyes in front of my face and for the first time I felt I was seeing clearly. Her eyes were a tint of green because the ocean’s perfect reflection. I was in my favorite place in the whole world and I realized I was with my favorite person. From that day on, our lives were never the same again, for better and for worse.
The first time we made love it was New Year’s Eve. Well technically it was the early morning of January 1st, 2010. It was neither of our first time but it felt like it was, like we were the only people in the world physically and emotionally made for each other. The passion and heat never left us, we molded into one soul. I remember my pounding heart beating against my chest harder with every kiss and the touch of her delicate, soft hands on my back. Before we slept together, it snowed outside. We went into the middle of the street and danced. Hand in hand, I twirled her around under the falling flakes dancing around us. I don’t even know if there was music playing, but that didn’t matter to us. All that mattered was being together, locking eyes, and breathing deep in between the happy kisses. The first time she cut herself while in our relationship I was in shock, which turned to rage.

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  1.   margarita said,

    on November 14th, 2011 at 2:56 am

    Enjoying learning about this girl so far; a few things i’d change tho: the first sentence of the first paragraph. Its a continuation of the story so the audience already knows “she was the coldest bitch” b/c you told us already. Another thing “From that day on, our lives were never the same again, for better and for worse,” I’d delete the for better and for worse part, sounds…i dont wanna say cheesy….but it left me wondering for a sec if they got married. Also the last line “The first time she cut herself while in our relationship I was in shock, which turned to rage,” it seems so random to me b/c you were describing all the happiness out in the soon and suddenly it goes into cutting. Maybe you want there as a sort of contrast?

  2.   Pru said,

    on November 14th, 2011 at 9:08 pm

    I agree with Margarita…I like the detail alot great job!

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