a day in the life.

poster on the wall.

Posted in Uncategorized by erin on the October 27, 2011

four men. stare at her.
watch her, see her when
no one else can.
bruised. bleeding. broken.
they see her, in her darkest
hour. they judge her.
naked and alone.
piles of clothes everywhere.
beautiful and simple topography
stands in her way. she
alone must get herself to the
other side. the corner of
novels, short stories, poems from
legends. from her.
they shaped her, sculpted
her carefully into the person
she is today. a much better
person. she fell in love
and opened her heart
fully. he held on tight
and she couldn’t find her
way. she ruined it.
now she’s a new person.
four men watch a transformation.

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  1.   Pru said,

    on October 29th, 2011 at 4:57 am

    I love it. I love the images that you paint here. Who are these four men? I like how she must gather herself and in the end she manages too. 🙂

  2.   samantha said,

    on October 30th, 2011 at 9:01 pm

    Is this a riddle poem? I’m a little thrown off by the four men and the title. Also when you say “he held on tight and she couldn’t find her way.”, is that referring to one of the 4 men? which one? Who are the 4 men? And what did she ruin? I see this as a symbolically strong poem but I’m not quite sure what it’s supposed to stand for yet. Please tell us =)

  3.   saadya said,

    on October 31st, 2011 at 1:34 am

    My guess is this is your insight into a poster of some sort (perhaps film?) that you’ve seen. The lines about typography make that clearer, but the reader is obviously left in the dark as to a plot line or in what context this is set. That’s your prerogative, of course, but I wonder why you chose to do it…

  4.   margarita said,

    on October 31st, 2011 at 10:34 pm

    Who is this woman? is it a face we all know, like the mona lisa? and who exactly are these men? When i saw the number 4 i unconsciously thought of the 4 horsemen of the apocalypse but I dont think thats who you are refering to. Is the woman on the poster? or is the title meant to be symbolic? It seems like its supposed to be symbolic after I read it a second time. Your poem is very intriguing.

  5.   jenny abeles said,

    on November 1st, 2011 at 7:46 pm

    hi erin. based on the many good questions your peers have about this poem, clearly you have succeeded in writing something intriguing indeed. the plot here is shadowy, but opening with four men observing a brutalized woman is disturbing and suggestive of violence. by the end of the poem, we are not sure the four men had anything to do with the state the woman is in, and are instead reminded that transformation is itself a violent and often ugly and uncomfortable process. so, yes, why are the men there? why are they watchng? do we need to know, and if not, what should we be feeling about these men? by the end, my feelings for the woman have shifted from pity, to curiosity, to respect, but i’m not sure what to feel about the men.

    am i right that legends, etc both emerge from the woman and affect her? an interesting idea–i’d spend more time on this image, personally.

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